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A Creative Writing Story i'm doing for english

  • this is a creative writing story i have to write for english so i wanna know what you peoples think cause it does include simple plan in it...my english teacher and CEA just dont know that yet... :P

    Today, 6 kids walk home from school.
    Pierre, Chuck, Sebastien, Patrick, Jeff and David have been friends for most of their lives.
    Pierre & Chuck are like brothers... they?ve been friends since the first day of high school in grade 7.
    Pierre is the second oldest of the bunch & also the one who always drinks a little too much.
    Chuck is the third oldest & the smartest. He?s gotten A?s and B+?s though out school. Chuck wears contacts most of the time but sometimes he wears glasses.
    They are the same age but Pierre?s birthday is in May & Chuck?s is in September so Pierre takes advantage of Chuck. They?re both in grade 11.
    Jeff is the oldest of the bunch and also the baldest... he shaved his head so he has no hair. He has 3 ear rings in each of his ears, a bottom lip ring and a nose ring in his nose. He?s in grade 12, almost graduated.
    David, the 4th oldest, is the emo looking one of the 6. He has black hair that goes under his left eye. He also wears glasses. He?s in grade 10.
    Sebastien, the youngest, is the one who cuts his hair like Pierre?s all the time. If Pierre has a mini Mohawk then Seb has the same. If Pierre has a shaved hair look, Seb does the same. He?s like a mini Pierre but he only has his hair the same as Pierre. He?s in grade 9.
    And there?s Pat... he?s the same age as David... 4th oldest also... their birthdays are close... Pat is in grade 10 with David and he?s the camera guy. He always has a camera in his hands. The guys practice in their band, Simple Plan, and he?s ALWAYS there recording it to put on the internet to see if people will watch it and like Simple Plan & become fans.
    Anyways, these 6 boys are walking home from school. Pierre, David and Seb are on skateboards and Chuck?s on a scooter. Pat is walking with his trusty camera. Jeff is just walking. They always pass this abandon creepy old house.
    Pierre has always wanted to go into it to see why it?s so abandon... he thinks there was a creepy young-looking-midget living there like last week but the guys don't believe him... until today...
    As they passed the old creepy house, there was a Mini Cooper in the driveway. They looked at it then at each other... then they looked back, it was gone... they looked behind them and saw a moving truck driving away with the Mini Cooper attached onto it.
    ?I guess we were wrong...? Seb said stopping on his skateboard, ?Bouvier was right for once, only if it was in school...?
    Pierre punched him in the gut.
    ?Shut up Lefebvre, I?m right about some things; they just don't relative to school...? Pierre said picking up his skateboard and looking at the old creepy house where a midget used to live, ?Let?s go in...?
    ?Are you drunk or crazy?? Chuck asked stopping Pierre from walking any farther onto the front lawn of the house, ?Dude, its abandon! Why the hell would you wanna go inside a creepy ass old house!??
    ?It?ll be fun, Chuck; why do you always have to ruin the fun?? Pierre said elbowing him in the stomach, ?Why do you wanna be boring like your dad??
    ?My dad?s a lawyer Bouvier; that?s why he?s so boring!? Chuck said following the rest of the guys and Pierre leading the way to the front door of the house, ?It doesn?t even have a ?for sale? sign...?
    ?Like you said, Comeau; it?s abandon!? Pierre said opening the door, ?Come on guys...?
    Pat turns on his video camera and walks behind all the guys with Pierre leading them into the house.
    ?Seb... dude, tell them why they should be watching this!? Pat said behind the camera and Seb just looked at him.
    ?Dude, why the hell should I tell them why they SHOULD be watching this when they ARE watching this?? Seb asked doing the ?too-much-to-drink? symbol with his hands, ?If you?re watching this right now, you made a good choice to watch the band... not the guy behind the camera...?
    Pat shakes his head at Sebastien and he just laughs and follows the guys.
    Pierre leads them down to the basement.
    ?Wow... that guy was really a midget...? Chuck said looking at the tiny door that was in the basement not fit for a midget.
    ?But if a midget lives here, why is there one skate with a long neck thing on it and the shelves so high?? Jeff asked.
    ?Dude, I donno... that?s the unsolvable question...? Chuck said.
    Pierre tries opening the mini door and it opens automatically when Pierre touched the doorknob.
    Pierre takes his backpack off and puts it with the pile of skateboard and the scooter...
    He bends down and walks though the tiny door.
    ?Holy crap...? Pierre said, ?Guys... you gotta see this...?
    The other guys drop their backpacks and put them on the pile of skateboards and the scooter.
    They bend down, one by one, into the small door made for a midget.
    ?Wow...? They all said at the same time.
    In this tiny room was a stage like a rock concert.
    ?We?re gonna perform in here one day...? Pierre said walking up to the stage seeing there was 3 mics (one on the right, left and in the middle, a drum set, 2 guitars (one of the left and one on the right) & a bass (on the left), ?It?s like it was made for... Simple Plan...?
    He climbs up on stage.
    ?This place is fucking huge!? Chuck said, ?Bigger than the Bell Centre in Montreal...?
    ?Duh!? Pierre said into the middle mic, ?Woh! That?s so awesome! It works! Get your asses up here, guys!?
    The other 4 guys in the band climb up on stage and Patrick stays on the floor recording them with this camera.
    Chuck grabbed some drum sticks and sat at the drums; David toke the bass and put the strap around his neck & stood beside the mic on the left of the stage; Jeff toke the guitar that was on the left side of the stage & put the strap around his neck; Seb toke the other guitar on the right side of the stage and puts the guitar strap around his neck & stands next to the 3rd mic on the right of the stage.
    They play their song, ?I?m just a kid?.
    Pat records it... but then...
    ?HEY YOU KIDS! WHY ARE YOU HERE!? A voice in the back of the arena yelled, ?Get outta here! You?re not suppose to be in here!?
    Pierre and Chuck jump off the stage leaving the other guys.
    The other guys shrug and follow Chuck & Pierre with Pat behind them with his camera.
    ?Who are you?? Chuck asked the strange man.
    ?I own this place!? The strange man said stepping into the arena though the mini door, ?I own this house, why are you in here??
    ?We saw a moving truck with a Mini Cooper attracted to it drive away so we thought this place was abandoned again...? Pierre said putting his hands in his pockets.
    ?The moving truck with that Mini Cooper? That was the bank taking my stuff away cause I can?t afford it!? The little man said, ?Why are you in my concert arena??
    ?It seems like it?s made for us...? Pierre said.
    ?It?s made for a 5 guy band with 2 guitarists, a bassist, a drummer and a lead singer with a guy who sells merch & manages the website for the band...? The man said, ?Not just you... even though you were good... I think you could go somewhere one day...?
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    what do you think of that shit?
    and i know it has swearing in it...its just how i talk and they're near my age in this story so they talk like me! :P fuck this shit this hahahhaa! and the man is defintly a midget! :lol:

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this is a creative writing story i have to write for english so i wanna know what you peoples think cause it does include simple plan in it...my english teacher and CEA just dont know that yet... :P

Today, 6 kids walk home from school.
Pierre, Chuck, Sebastien, Patrick, Jeff and David have been friends for most of their lives.
Pierre & Chuck are like brothers... they?ve been friends since the first day of high school in grade 7.
Pierre is the second oldest of the bunch & also the one who always drinks a little too much.
Chuck is the third oldest & the smartest. He?s gotten A?s and B+?s though out school. Chuck wears contacts most of the time but sometimes he wears glasses.
They are the same age but Pierre?s birthday is in May & Chuck?s is in September so Pierre takes advantage of Chuck. They?re both in grade 11.
Jeff is the oldest of the bunch and also the baldest... he shaved his head so he has no hair. He has 3 ear rings in each of his ears, a bottom lip ring and a nose ring in his nose. He?s in grade 12, almost graduated.
David, the 4th oldest, is the emo looking one of the 6. He has black hair that goes under his left eye. He also wears glasses. He?s in grade 10.
Sebastien, the youngest, is the one who cuts his hair like Pierre?s all the time. If Pierre has a mini Mohawk then Seb has the same. If Pierre has a shaved hair look, Seb does the same. He?s like a mini Pierre but he only has his hair the same as Pierre. He?s in grade 9.
And there?s Pat... he?s the same age as David... 4th oldest also... their birthdays are close... Pat is in grade 10 with David and he?s the camera guy. He always has a camera in his hands. The guys practice in their band, Simple Plan, and he?s ALWAYS there recording it to put on the internet to see if people will watch it and like Simple Plan & become fans.
Anyways, these 6 boys are walking home from school. Pierre, David and Seb are on skateboards and Chuck?s on a scooter. Pat is walking with his trusty camera. Jeff is just walking. They always pass this abandon creepy old house.
Pierre has always wanted to go into it to see why it?s so abandon... he thinks there was a creepy young-looking-midget living there like last week but the guys don't believe him... until today...
As they passed the old creepy house, there was a Mini Cooper in the driveway. They looked at it then at each other... then they looked back, it was gone... they looked behind them and saw a moving truck driving away with the Mini Cooper attached onto it.
?I guess we were wrong...? Seb said stopping on his skateboard, ?Bouvier was right for once, only if it was in school...?
Pierre punched him in the gut.
?Shut up Lefebvre, I?m right about some things; they just don't relative to school...? Pierre said picking up his skateboard and looking at the old creepy house where a midget used to live, ?Let?s go in...?
?Are you drunk or crazy?? Chuck asked stopping Pierre from walking any farther onto the front lawn of the house, ?Dude, its abandon! Why the hell would you wanna go inside a creepy ass old house!??
?It?ll be fun, Chuck; why do you always have to ruin the fun?? Pierre said elbowing him in the stomach, ?Why do you wanna be boring like your dad??
?My dad?s a lawyer Bouvier; that?s why he?s so boring!? Chuck said following the rest of the guys and Pierre leading the way to the front door of the house, ?It doesn?t even have a ?for sale? sign...?
?Like you said, Comeau; it?s abandon!? Pierre said opening the door, ?Come on guys...?
Pat turns on his video camera and walks behind all the guys with Pierre leading them into the house.
?Seb... dude, tell them why they should be watching this!? Pat said behind the camera and Seb just looked at him.
?Dude, why the hell should I tell them why they SHOULD be watching this when they ARE watching this?? Seb asked doing the ?too-much-to-drink? symbol with his hands, ?If you?re watching this right now, you made a good choice to watch the band... not the guy behind the camera...?
Pat shakes his head at Sebastien and he just laughs and follows the guys.
Pierre leads them down to the basement.
?Wow... that guy was really a midget...? Chuck said looking at the tiny door that was in the basement not fit for a midget.
?But if a midget lives here, why is there one skate with a long neck thing on it and the shelves so high?? Jeff asked.
?Dude, I donno... that?s the unsolvable question...? Chuck said.
Pierre tries opening the mini door and it opens automatically when Pierre touched the doorknob.
Pierre takes his backpack off and puts it with the pile of skateboard and the scooter...
He bends down and walks though the tiny door.
?Holy crap...? Pierre said, ?Guys... you gotta see this...?
The other guys drop their backpacks and put them on the pile of skateboards and the scooter.
They bend down, one by one, into the small door made for a midget.
?Wow...? They all said at the same time.
In this tiny room was a stage like a rock concert.
?We?re gonna perform in here one day...? Pierre said walking up to the stage seeing there was 3 mics (one on the right, left and in the middle, a drum set, 2 guitars (one of the left and one on the right) & a bass (on the left), ?It?s like it was made for... Simple Plan...?
He climbs up on stage.
?This place is fucking huge!? Chuck said, ?Bigger than the Bell Centre in Montreal...?
?Duh!? Pierre said into the middle mic, ?Woh! That?s so awesome! It works! Get your asses up here, guys!?
The other 4 guys in the band climb up on stage and Patrick stays on the floor recording them with this camera.
Chuck grabbed some drum sticks and sat at the drums; David toke the bass and put the strap around his neck & stood beside the mic on the left of the stage; Jeff toke the guitar that was on the left side of the stage & put the strap around his neck; Seb toke the other guitar on the right side of the stage and puts the guitar strap around his neck & stands next to the 3rd mic on the right of the stage.
They play their song, ?I?m just a kid?.
Pat records it... but then...
?HEY YOU KIDS! WHY ARE YOU HERE!? A voice in the back of the arena yelled, ?Get outta here! You?re not suppose to be in here!?
Pierre and Chuck jump off the stage leaving the other guys.
The other guys shrug and follow Chuck & Pierre with Pat behind them with his camera.
?Who are you?? Chuck asked the strange man.
?I own this place!? The strange man said stepping into the arena though the mini door, ?I own this house, why are you in here??
?We saw a moving truck with a Mini Cooper attracted to it drive away so we thought this place was abandoned again...? Pierre said putting his hands in his pockets.
?The moving truck with that Mini Cooper? That was the bank taking my stuff away cause I can?t afford it!? The little man said, ?Why are you in my concert arena??
?It seems like it?s made for us...? Pierre said.
?It?s made for a 5 guy band with 2 guitarists, a bassist, a drummer and a lead singer with a guy who sells merch & manages the website for the band...? The man said, ?Not just you... even though you were good... I think you could go somewhere one day...?
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what do you think of that shit?
and i know it has swearing in it...its just how i talk and they're near my age in this story so they talk like me! :P fuck this shit this hahahhaa! and the man is defintly a midget! :lol:

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xD midget


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Haha good job! I like it!

Arcticangel i laughed at that part too!

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wow,that's great,i cant wait to read more of it :)

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sorry...guys...
there is no more...unless i get REALLY bored...

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aww. well i hope all your friends bail on plans and you get bored and your stuck writing this story. well not really but you get my point


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It was really good!!!!! :D
And the midget xD

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i'll remember that...

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i'll remember that...

you better :P


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oh i will!
okay here's something for YOU to do if u get ditched, read this story again and see if you can come up with a chapter...related to the halloween thing this saturday maybe...
i dont care just make something up...

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benjirock wrote:
oh i will!
okay here's something for YOU to do if u get ditched, read this story again and see if you can come up with a chapter...related to the halloween thing this saturday maybe...
i dont care just make something up...

lol u want me to write a chapter??


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that's what i'm saying dude

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You know what. fine here it is.

"Us? Go somewhere someday? Sure." Chuck was the pessimest, or maybe he didn't like midgets, either or he was being sarcastic for the end part anyways.

"HELL YEAH!" David was like the opposite of Chuck, he was sure the band was gonna make it and he loved midgets and he was no where near sarcastic.

The midget winced to David sudden volume "Wait dude, if you have the resources to make this" - pierre gestured towards the stage - "Then you must know people. like record label people" Pierre was nodding his head.

"First of all do not EVER call me dude or any kinda slang word EVER, that includes being called a midget. got it?" It was a rhetorical question but Chuck wanted to be sassy and said "Yes Sir" giving a snappy salute.

Jeff elbowed Chuck in the gut. "Chuck don't push it." He said under his breath. "Everything settled?" the small man said another rhetorical question and this time no one answered it.

"Ok good Yes boys I do know a record label, mine actually. course i haven't gotten a band yet, which explains them repo people taking my stuff, but if i wanna get money i gotta get a good first band. By the way my name is Steven but you can call me Mr. Steven" Mr. Steven straightened himself out and put a grin on his face.

"Well Mr. Steven I assure you that were not just any band. Were Simple Plan" Seb coaxed. "Fine, pick out your songs cause your making a record gentlemen." Steven shook hands with each member, but one of them squeezed harder than the rest.

They all went into his studio and before anyone could do anything Mr. Steven said "First you must sign this contract you know legal reasons."

Chuck rushed to be the first to get there. "Lemme read it first. My dad didn't raise a fool" Chuck said then snatched the contract from the veridically challenged man. Mr. Steven mumbled something like "I beg to differ"

"Mhm this seem lagit" Chuck concluded. After all the boys signed (including Pat) they grabbed there instruments and started playing.

"Chuck make the beat faster, it will give the song more tempo and make it more jumpy" Mr. Steven instructed. "Fine" Chuck retorted he didn't like people criticizing his work especially from people he didn't like in the first place.

"I'm only trying to help you" Mr. Steven was getting annoyed too. "I don't need your fucken help you short little midget fuck!" Chuck yelled at him, he had gotten on his last nerve.

"I told you never to call me that" Mr. Steven let out a little cackle that transformed into a loud 'muahaha' type thing. "What the fuck?!?!" All 6 boys screamed. "Jinx!" Steven smiled and morphed into a colossal giant blue monster.

"That contract you signed was fake. All i needed was 6 kids signatures to become what i am and someone has to call me a midget and of course Chuckey here doomed you all to death!"

Inside the sound proof studio you couldn't even hear the children's screams.

I know its super lame and short but I'm tired lol
have fun
ps someone elses turn to write a chapter.


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pass it on then...
and it doesnt have to go with the story...
it can all be like dream after dream or daydream cause they're so bored at school...whatever you like...

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this is the on core to my chapter... i know it has nothing to do with what arcticangel wrote but this is another 'short story for school...due monday...
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Chapter 3: on core to the Prologue

The 6 boys had returned to the creepy old house that they pass everyday on the way to & from school, on Halloween night.

They see the shutters slamming on the windows on the 2nd floor.

The boys decided to go to the window of the basement, really the only reason they came out on Halloween anyway.

Pierre & David crouched down & saw a light on.

?What is it?? Chuck asked stuffing his hands in his coat pockets from the cold Halloween night wind.

?A light?s on...? David said peeking though the tiny window, ?But I can?t tell who or what is down there through...?

?It?s the midget... and... a giant?? Pierre said falling backwards on his butt, ?Owe... damn it!? Jeff helped him to his feet, ?Thanks, Stinco...?

Suddenly the light above them on the house turned on.

?Who the heLL is on my property?!? A loud but midget-like voice yelled.

?SIMPLE PLAN!? The 6 boys yelled.

?Who the heLL is Simple Plan?? The midget yelled.

?The 6 teenagers that trespassed on your property & snuck into your secret arena room with the mini door in the basement...? Pierre half-yelled to the midget.

?Oh! That Simple Plan... GET THE heLL off my property before I unleash my giant friend on you!? The midget yelled, ?I shall unleash the giant family and my other midget friends on you!?

Pierre shared a look with Chuck, David & Jeff shared a look and Seb gave a freaked out look to Pat... then they all burst out laughing.

The 6 boys crouched down & stared into the window & stayed completely silent.

?Yo, big man; those ratty teens gone? With their baggy pants & skateboards & baggy sweaters & skate shoes and baggy t-shirts... they gone big man?? The midget asked the giant, ?Look out the window, big guy...?

?Okay...? The giant said as he walked loudly over to the window & the 6 boys were looking into, ?Hey Mitch... There?s 6 teens at the window looking at us... And waving at me... Hi!?

The giant waved back to the 6 boys who waved at him trying not to laugh.

?Okay, let me see ?em!? The midget ?Mitch? said.

The giant nodded & lifted the midget up to the window...

?Hello fellas...? The midget ?Mitch? said crossing his tiny arms, ?You must be getting home... it?s way past midnight & your bedtimes...?

?Okay... 1: We?re teenagers 15 to 18... We don?t need to go home and 2: Midnight isn?t our bedtime... we don?t have bedtimes...? Pierre said crossing his arms at the midget.

?Well then... would you like to come in & rock out, boys?? The midget asked, ?Before I call the police & have you taken away to JAIL!?

?Ya right...? David said crossing his arms laughing.

The midget gets the giant to open the small window & invites the boys in.

They jump in through the small window. The midget invites them through the tiny door to the arena...

The teens crawl through the mini door.

They look around... screaming midgets & giants in the stands and the floor were filled with kids from school... their friend, Frenchie, brought them to the stage.

?What?s happening, Frenchie?? Pierre asked.

Some tech people from the crew gave Jeff & Seb guitars and a bass to David.

Frenchie put wireless things on the back of David, Seb and Jeff?s pants for their wireless interments and Pierre?s for his wireless mic.

The boys put in ear things as if they were [u]really[/u] going to play in front of most kids from school, some of the teachers they?ve had & a lot of giants and midgets...

Frenchie handed Chuck drumsticks, a guitar pick to each Jeff, Seb and David & a mic to Pierre.

The boys stared at each other in a circle.

Pat takes out his camera.

?Surprise...? Frenchie & Pat yelled making the boys all jump.

?WHAT!? The boys yelled & Pierre grabbed Pat by his shirt, ?PATRICK!?

?It was the midget?s idea...? Pat said handing his camera to one of the security guards, ?And the giant...?

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lol that was awesome


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"PAT!" The 5 boys yelled.

"They said if you didn't do the gig... The giants would smash your faces into the ground..." Pat said, "Including Frenchie & me... And friends from school..."

"Fine.... we'll do the stupid gig ass..." Pierre said, "Pound it, guys; Just like at school concerts... but this one?s with midgets that are twice as small as us and giants that are three times bigger than us...?

The 6 boys pound their fists together.

Frenchie stays on Seb?s side of the stage to help with tech stuff.

Pat goes down in front to record it.

The boys take deep breathes and go out on stage...
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that's the end of the chapter...

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arcticangel wrote:
lol that was awesome

omg i know! 8) :P

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i forgot how funny i was in grade 10 :P :lol: 8) :P :wink:

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I wrote a fic about the

I wrote a fic about the writing of Shut Up for a grade 11 exam! theme was power of music

 

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